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You have a complaint about the hotel you stayed at while attending a meeting that was booked by the organiser of a company meeting. Write a letter to the organiser of the meeting and include Details about the meeting The problem you face What should be done

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Dear Sir, My name is Rajnish Kaur.
i
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 am expressing my terrible experience through
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email
while
 attending
meeting
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a meeting
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 in
hotel
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a hotel
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by
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 the company person.
This
metting
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meeting
 has been
orgnised
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organised
 in
hotel
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the hotel
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 .The name of
hotel
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the hotel
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 is TAJ . No doubt, it is
high
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 chain of
property
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the property
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 but the
think
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thing
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 is, it had very bad
arragements
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arrangements
done
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 by the staff members.It was held in a big
confrence
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conference
 hall but all the furniture
such
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a chair
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chair
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chairs
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,
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and table
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table
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tables
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 looked
like
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very old and
it
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there
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 was
big
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a big
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 issue with
unblancing
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unbalancing
balancing
 furniture .
Due to
 that
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interruption
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 my
colleques
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colleagues
 were very depressed.
On the other hand
,
Electercity
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electricity
 supplies were not good all the
wires
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 power was shaking again and again.The
switch board
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switchboard
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 was very old style ,we
fited
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fit
 the adapter on them.On the
spot
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 we had to
bought
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 all the stuff related
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to electroinic
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electroinic
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electronic
.
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 staff service was very slow. The
satff
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staff
 did not have much communication to
dealing
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 with the person.
Due to
lack
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the lack
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of service
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service
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service,
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 you need to take
refund
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the refund
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 and
do
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the action against them.We paid a good money .
According to
 me,they do not deserve a huge money so please write to
mail
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their manager and what will be their
respone
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response
 please let me know
,
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 if they will
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 to you. With the best regards, Rajnish Kaur.
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task achievement
Your letter successfully conveys your dissatisfaction and provides relevant details, but it could be more structured. Starting with an introduction that clearly states the purpose of the letter will help.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow by organizing the issues you faced in separate paragraphs. This will make it easier for the reader to follow your points.
task achievement
Your complaint about the hotel includes specific details, making your concerns clear and understandable.
task achievement
You appropriately request the organizer to take action, including asking for a refund and contacting the hotel’s management.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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