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Some people say that fashion affects our lives in a negative way however others say that it has more positive effects on our life discuss and give your opinion??

#people #fashion #lives #effects #life
In
this
 contemporary era, a huge change in fashion sense
have
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 been noted.
Its
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 been argued that
,
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 it will affect the lives of people in
negative
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a negative
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 way
while
other
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others
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 believe it has benefits. In my opinion, dressing sense in today's world has both, merits and demerits.
In
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one
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the one
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 hand,
way
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the way
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 of clothing makes a person confident and attractive. They are able to go to
the
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expensive and branded places with confidence, even, they earn lots of respect when entering any multinational company. To
exemplift
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exemplify
, if a person wears formal on the day of
interview
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the interview
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, it gives an impression towards the interviewer and the interviewee
also
 remains confident
while
 giving answers.
Hence
, dressing sense builds
a
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confidence which
is
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 a positive effect.
On the other hand
, designers are making strange designs which are difficult to carry
in
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to
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 social gatherings,
on
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for
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 which they are charging a huge amount. Masses are attracted towards
the
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famous personalities and adapt the way they
are dressing
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dress
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 and spend
massive
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a massive
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mount
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amount
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 of money. To exemplify,
perrsonalities
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personalities
 who went to
Met
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the Met
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 Gala, wore expensive dresses after which people tried to buy and wear .
Therefore
, designer clothing has made
difficult
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it difficult
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 for
this
 generation to wear a dress.
To conclude
, the change in fashion has both benefits and drawbacks. There are many kinds of dresses in the market which
helps
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help
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 the individual to enhance their
personaility
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personality
 and be confident socially
while
 on the downside, it
had
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 led to many fashion designers in the market who make
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it hard
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hard to wear
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hard-to-wear
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 and carry dresses which
costs
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cost
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 them a lot.
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Ensure to proofread for grammar and spelling errors. For instance, 'Its been argued' should be 'It has been argued' and 'to exemplift' should be 'to exemplify'.
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Provide more relevant specific examples to support your points, such as mentioning specific studies or statistics.
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Try to elaborate your points with more details. This will help in achieving a higher score for task achievement and coherence.
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Work on sentence variety and use of complex structures to enhance readability and interest.
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The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, effectively summarizing the main points.
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The essay covers both positive and negative effects of fashion in a balanced manner.

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