Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.
It is believed by some
people
that governments should spend money
looking for aliens
. In
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On
contrary
, many of them think that there are Correct article usage
the contrary
lot
of problems to solve in Change the article
a lot
this
world and the
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that the
money
spending
on Replace the word
spent
aliens
is nothing but waste. However
, this
essay will argue why authority
should continue looking for life on other planets.
On one hand, our planet is vulnerable for many reasons. Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
Firstly
, the tactonic
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tectonic
plats
are in a position that could generate massive vibration Correct your spelling
plates
in
land. Change preposition
on
Hence
, millions of people
might die without any prior prepraration
as Correct your spelling
preparation
the
earthquakes are unpredictable. Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, a scientific study predicted that within 100-year
of time, our planet could face multiple severe earthquakes that could kill billions of Correct your spelling
100 years
people
. Secondly
, the sea level of the earth is rising because of the
climate change. Correct article usage
apply
Therefore
, many cities and villages might go under water
in the upcoming years. Correct your spelling
underwater
For
this
reason, the
developed countries have started investing Correct article usage
apply
money
on
different scientific organizations, e.g. NASA, to search for life on other planets in Change preposition
in
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the milkyway
milkyway
to fight Change the capitalization
Milkyway
milky way
with
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these crisis
.
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this crisis
these crises
On the other hand
, millions of people
in the
underdeveloped nations are dying because of the lack of proper Correct article usage
apply
nutritions
and acute diseases. It is mainly because these countries are Fix the agreement mistake
nutrition
over-populated
. Correct your spelling
overpopulated
Therefore
, some people
argue that authority
should pay more attention Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
on
solving these issues. Change preposition
to
For example
, a study found in Africa that more than 25% of newborn children die because of lack
of vaccinations in Correct article usage
a lack
early
stage. Another study predicted that most of the Asian countries will go Correct article usage
the early
under water
if there Correct your spelling
underwater
is
no Change the verb form
are
promt
steps to fight climate change. Correct your spelling
proper
Hence
, some argue that more public money
are
needed to fight Change the verb form
is
these humanitarian crisis
rather than on Change the determiner
this humanitarian crisis
these humanitarian crises
aliens
.
While
it is true that we need to solve tonnes of earth
problems, at the same time, we have to explore Capitalize word
Earth
other part
of the Change the wording
another part
other parts
planets
. It is because, if our planet Fix the agreement mistake
planet
are
destroyed by Change the verb form
is
earthquake
or by other Add an article
an earthquake
planetery
collision, we need to survive. Without exploring other habitats, all other efforts to Correct your spelling
planetary
sovle
the earth's problems only might go in vain.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
solve
while
it is necessary to spend the budgets
on improving Fix the agreement mistake
budget
people
's life
, I believe it is more logical to budget our Fix the agreement mistake
lives
money
to find aliens
for the ultimate betterment of human
population.Add an article
the human
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