The following process diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the diagram.

The following process diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the diagram.
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The given diagram illustrates the way greenhouse gases get energy from the Sun.  
Firstly
, photons from the
center
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of the Solar system
gets
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get
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to Earth or
is
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are
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reflected by
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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. Some electromagnetic waves stay on our planet,
while
a small fraction of it gets trapped by greenhouse gases and
remaining
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the remaining
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power is radiated to space.  
While
ambiance
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ambience
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holds all warmth, when there's no Sun, it needs CO2, which people produce a lot. We generate it mainly through vehicles or burning fossil fuels in factories.  
Overall
, there are some stages, 2 equipment, which are cars and manufactories, and 2 resources, which are heat from the Sun and carbon dioxide in
this
linear process, where both nature and people
involve
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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