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The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The maps illustrate the differences in a coastal region in Australia between 1950 and today.
Overall
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, the beachfront area
undergone
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has undergone
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 significant development, with the addition of various facilities and the expansion of
road
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the road
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 and a swimming
pool
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. In 1950, a short road was located at the top of
this
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 area which connected with the city end at the car park. Next to the car
park
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 there was a pavilion where visitors could enjoy the view. Along the roadside, a playground and some dining tables were next to each other. Each side of the beach had a
25
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25-meter
meters
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 swimming
pool
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.
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, a Lighthouse was located at the left bottom of the beach. Time back to now, the most noticeable change is that the road has been extended until the lighthouse.
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, Along the roadside, the playground has been removed,
instead
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 of another car park. The
left side
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left-side
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 swimming
pool
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is
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has
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expended
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extended
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 its length to 50
meters
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.
In addition
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, a restaurant and a surf club are built near the
50
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50-meter
meters
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pool
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. Another surf club is located near the
25
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25-meter
meters
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pool
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. The lighthouse, pavilion
an
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and
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 former parking lot are the same as before.
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