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The line graph illustrates the number of specific types of vehicle which was registered in European use from 1996 to 2006

The line graph illustrates the number of specific types of vehicle which was registered in European use from 1996 to 2006
The line graph illustrates the number of specific types of
vehicle
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 which was registered in European use from 1996 to 2006
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, we can easily see that private cars were the most registered vehicle which was the most popular means of transport in 2006. Trucks were vehicles which have changed a lot from 1996 to 2006.
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 with, the percentage of private cars in 1996 was approximately 20%.
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, that figure in 2006 was significantly higher than it was in the past.
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, the ratio of motorbikes was the only figure which decreased in 10 years. It actually has gone down with a negative number at -33%.
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, the proportion of registered public transport remained stable
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 10 years. In comparison, the number of motorbikes was the contrast with the figure
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 other transportation. The percentage of registered trucks in 2006 was doubled than it was in 1996. The proportion of other transportation was 2,5% and 1,25% in 1996 and 2006 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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