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The chart below shows the number of international applicants to the universities of one European country.

The chart below shows the number of international applicants to the universities of one European country.
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The bar chart illustrates how many international students from four distinct countries applied to universities in a particular European nation varied in consecutive yearly from 2004 to 2008.
Overall
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, the number of
applicants
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 from Japan and the
USA
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 witnessed an upward trend by varying degrees,
while
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 China showed a consistent decrease throughout the surveyed years. Meanwhile, the data for Russia remained relatively constant. Notably, the
USA
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applicants
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 surpassed China to register the highest in the second half of the
period
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. Regarding
applicants
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 from Japan and the
USA
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, both witnessed an increase in their applications to universities over the given
period
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. Starting at roughly 7.000
applicants
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 in 2004, Japanese students who applied to universities grew steadily each year, reaching 10.000 student applications in 2008. Despite the continuous increase, Japan remained in third place by the end of the
period
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 among the four countries. Meanwhile, the figure for the
USA
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 showed a similarity, albeit to a greater extent with 13.000 in 2004 and approximately 2.000 to 5.000 increase every year, culminating in 23.000 candidates in 2008,
thus
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 leading the chart. Moving on to the remaining countries, China and Russia university candidate patterns were different. The former was highest in 2004, prior to a fall of nearly 9.000
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 in 2006. It
then
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 persisted in declining to under 16.000
applicants
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 in 2008 and being surpassed by the
USA
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. It
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 the least popular for Russia, which remained the lowest throughout the
period
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, consistently under 5.000
applicants
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words applicants, usa, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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