The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population. This is causing problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for industrialized and developing nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggestion least one possible solution.

It has been universally accepted that
problem
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of overpopulation is escalating at an alarming rate. The
problem
is bringing a state of depression among the masses and in
economy
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the economy
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too. There are
plethora
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of reasons
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the same and its possible solutions can be suggested too which are discussed as follows. In regards to the
problem
, the major reason which can be stated is some cities are
in
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rich with
work places
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workplaces
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and
offers
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more opportunities to workers than others,
therefore
people
feel forced to leave their native lands for
crowded
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the crowded
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town
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in order to make money. In support
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this
reason, a fact known is after a
while
those
people
settle down in that city and build a family. Another problematic cause
considered
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to be a global issue, which is
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baby boom.
For instance
, some couples try to
make
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babies as much as possible without even considering their financial situation. Seeing the
problem
with a brighter mind, many
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solutions can be helpful to curb
this
menace. One
if
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the
solution
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solutions
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is to provide
people
from every area of the country
equal
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chances of getting employed
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opening new factories and plants.
Secondly
,
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and
controlling
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the massive number of
new borns
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newborns
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, some laws ought to be accepted by
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the government
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.
For instance
, China banned married
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couples
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having
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more than one baby for several years,
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this
method contributed
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government to cope
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government's coping
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with overpopulation problems.
To conclude
, solving a global issue is not easy but with the joint efforts of the
people
,
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control can be taken over the
problem
with the aforementioned suggested measures. I believe that everyone should come forward to mitigate
this
problem
.
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task achievement
Ensure that your essay directly addresses each part of the task, elaborating thoroughly on both the problems and solutions to overpopulation. Currently, the argument regarding economic depression is not fully developed. Expanding on this with more detailed points would enhance the task achievement.
coherence cohesion
While you have a clear structure, some paragraphs could logically flow better. For instance, start by describing the problems more systematically, then move on to solutions without overlapping ideas so much. Improving transitional phrases can make the essay flow more smoothly.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes an introduction and a conclusion, which helps to frame the discussion effectively.
task achievement
You have provided specific examples, such as China's one-child policy, to support your points, which strengthens your task response.

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