The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population. This is causing problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for industrialized and developing nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggestion least one possible solution.
It has been universally accepted that
problem
of overpopulation is escalating at an alarming rate. The Correct article usage
the problem
problem
is bringing a state of depression among the masses and in economy
too. There are Add an article
the economy
plethora
of reasons Add an article
a plethora
of
the same and its possible solutions can be suggested too which are discussed as follows.
In regards to the Change preposition
for
problem
, the major reason which can be stated is some cities are in
rich with Change preposition
apply
work places
and Correct your spelling
workplaces
offers
more opportunities to workers than others, Correct subject-verb agreement
offer
therefore
people
feel forced to leave their native lands for crowded
Add an article
the crowded
a crowded
town
in order to make money. In support Fix the agreement mistake
towns
to
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of
this
reason, a fact known is after a while
those people
settle down in that city and build a family. Another problematic cause considered
to be a global issue, which is Add a missing verb
is considered
so called
baby boom. Add a hyphen
so-called
For instance
, some couples try to make
babies as much as possible without even considering their financial situation.
Seeing the Verb problem
have
problem
with a brighter mind, many of
solutions can be helpful to curb Change preposition
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this
menace. One if
the Correct your spelling
of
solution
is to provide Fix the agreement mistake
solutions
people
from every area of the country equal
chances of getting employed Change preposition
with equal
via
opening new factories and plants. Change preposition
by
Secondly
, for preventing
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to prevent
controlling
the massive number of Wrong verb form
control
new borns
, some laws ought to be accepted by Correct your spelling
newborns
government
. Add an article
the government
For instance
, China banned married couple
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couples
having
more than one baby for several years, Change preposition
from having
eventually
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eventually,
this
method contributed the
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to the
government to cope
with overpopulation problems.
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government's coping
To conclude
, solving a global issue is not easy but with the joint efforts of the people
, a
control can be taken over the Correct article usage
apply
problem
with the aforementioned suggested measures. I believe that everyone should come forward to mitigate this
problem
.Submitted by nigar.rza.2502 on
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task achievement
Ensure that your essay directly addresses each part of the task, elaborating thoroughly on both the problems and solutions to overpopulation. Currently, the argument regarding economic depression is not fully developed. Expanding on this with more detailed points would enhance the task achievement.
coherence cohesion
While you have a clear structure, some paragraphs could logically flow better. For instance, start by describing the problems more systematically, then move on to solutions without overlapping ideas so much. Improving transitional phrases can make the essay flow more smoothly.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes an introduction and a conclusion, which helps to frame the discussion effectively.
task achievement
You have provided specific examples, such as China's one-child policy, to support your points, which strengthens your task response.
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