The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features.
This
diagrams
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details the whole process
about
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salmon
’s
life
. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that the whole
life
cycle can be divided into 3 steps from little
salmon
called fry to adult one about 10 years approximately.
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the beginning with eggs, they are produced by the adult
salmon
in the upper river which has
slow
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speed of water there. Those eggs attach
the
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bottom of reeds with small stones nearby. In the subsequent stage , after about 5 or 6 months, they become
to
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fry with 3 to 8
centimeters
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length living in the lower river. Those fry spend about 4 years in
such
a
fast flowing
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area before coming to the smolt. Smolt is the second stage of their
life
in which they can grow up to more than 12 cm and prefer to live in the open sea and keep it for 5 years.
Finally
, they eventually become
to
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adult
salmon
which
has
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more than 70 cm
length
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body. At
this
stage,
salmon
may choose to produce eggs in the upper river and the
life
cycle
begin
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again.
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