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The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features.
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This
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diagrams
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 details the whole process
about
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of
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salmon
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’s
life
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. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the whole
life
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 cycle can be divided into 3 steps from little
salmon
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 called fry to adult one about 10 years approximately.
At
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 the beginning with eggs, they are produced by the adult
salmon
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 in the upper river which has
slow
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a slow
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 speed of water there. Those eggs attach
the
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to the
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 bottom of reeds with small stones nearby. In the subsequent stage , after about 5 or 6 months, they become
to
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fry with 3 to 8
centimeters
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 length living in the lower river. Those fry spend about 4 years in
such
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 a
fast flowing
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 area before coming to the smolt. Smolt is the second stage of their
life
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 in which they can grow up to more than 12 cm and prefer to live in the open sea and keep it for 5 years.
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, they eventually become
to
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adult
salmon
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 which
has
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 more than 70 cm
length
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in length
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 body. At
this
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 stage,
salmon
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 may choose to produce eggs in the upper river and the
life
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 cycle
begin
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 again.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words life, salmon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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