The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given picture illustrates the
producing
process of making ready-made Correct word choice
apply
sugar
.
In general
the given process includes seven steps, which Add a comma
general,
starts
Correct subject-verb agreement
start
wit
the growing of Correct your spelling
with
sugar
canes
and ends
with drying and cooling ready-made Correct subject-verb agreement
end
sugar
.
A first
, farmers plant Correct article usage
First
sugar
canes
, which Fix the agreement mistake
cane
is growing
Wrong verb form
grows
during
twelve or eighteen months.The Change preposition
for
nextt
step Correct your spelling
next
isdividedd
two ways.The Correct your spelling
is divided
firstt
one is Correct your spelling
first
automatically
, in which Replace the adverb
automatic
sugar
canesares
harvested by special Correct your spelling
cane is
sugar
gatering
machines.Correct your spelling
gathering
catering
Thed
second one is harvested by farmers, who cut down ripe Correct your spelling
The
sugar
canes
. Fix the agreement mistake
cane
Following
this
, sugar
canes
are crushing
in Wrong verb form
crushed
the
special equipment, in which Correct article usage
apply
canes
squeeze to
the Change preposition
apply
sugar
juice
. Step four is purifying sugar
juice
in the triangle limestone filter. After
this
proces
, Correct your spelling
process
sugar
juice
is filtered, and the evaporator heats this
juice
and makes syrup from it. The next step is
centrifuge
Fix the infinitive
to centrifuge
this
syrop
. It separates the Correct your spelling
syrup
sugar
crystals from the syrup. And finally
, drying and cooling the ready-made sugar
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, canes, juice with synonyms.
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