The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given picture illustrates the
producing
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process of making ready-made
sugar
. In
general
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the given process includes seven steps, which
starts
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wit
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with
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the growing of
sugar
canes
and
ends
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end
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with drying and cooling ready-made
sugar
.
A first
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First
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, farmers plant
sugar
canes
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cane
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, which
is growing
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grows
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during
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for
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twelve or eighteen months.The
nextt
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next
step
isdividedd
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is divided
two ways.The
firstt
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first
one is
automatically
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, in which
sugar
canesares
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cane is
harvested by special
sugar
gatering
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gathering
catering
machines.
Thed
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The
second one is harvested by farmers, who cut down ripe
sugar
canes
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cane
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.
Following
this
,
sugar
canes
are
crushing
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in
the
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special equipment, in which
canes
squeeze
to
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the
sugar
juice
. Step four is purifying
sugar
juice
in the triangle limestone filter.
After
this
proces
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process
,
sugar
juice
is filtered, and the evaporator heats
this
juice
and makes syrup from it.
The next step is
centrifuge
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this
syrop
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syrup
. It separates the
sugar
crystals from the syrup. And
finally
, drying and cooling the ready-made
sugar
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, canes, juice with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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