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You have recently moved into a new house and have noticed that the garden is in need of some maintenance. Write a letter to your landlord requesting permission to make the necessary improvements.

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Dear Mr Johnson, I am writing
this
 letter to you
for granting
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 me permission to improve
garden
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the garden
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. Since I
had
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moved ten days back, I
had
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 observed that
garden
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the garden
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 requires a face-lift.
Furthermore
, The
garden
 is almost vandalised. There are no more pavements and the plants
have
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 overgrown now. All
this
require
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 cutting and grooming by
professional
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 gardener.
Therefore
, I am requesting you
to
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grant me permission to
make
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take
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 over the
garden
 and try to maintain it . I will make sure that
garden
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the garden
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look
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looks
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 nice and
there
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 is minimal damage
happen
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when the work starts.
Lastly
, I will hire some
professional
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 to mawn grass and cut
overgrwon
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overgrown
 plants. The planned activity will take one week to complete. if there is disturbance occurs because of
this
. Please inform me, I will make sure it
should
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 not interrupt your kids
in
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study
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. I look forward to your prompt response on
this
 matter. Yours sincerely, Mark wood
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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking the text into more clearly defined paragraphs to improve readability. For example, separating the introduction, the current state of the garden, your request for improvements, and your assurances into distinct sections.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single main idea and flows smoothly into the next. You might incorporate transitional words and phrases to better link your points.
task achievement
Address the landlord by their full name if you know it (e.g., Mr. John Johnson) or use their title and last name (e.g., Mr. Johnson) consistently throughout the letter. It adds a level of respect and professionalism, which is important in formal letters.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and formal, which is appropriate for a letter to a landlord.
task achievement
A clear request for permission to make improvements is evident, and the rationale behind the request is effectively communicated.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a proper closing which reiterates the request and shows a willingness to cooperate with the landlord, maintaining good rapport.
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