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Writing Samples
Band 6

Practice 1: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter, •describe the situation •explain why you cannot continue at this time •say what action you would like to take You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any address.

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Dear tutor, I am writing to you in order to let you know that, unfortunately, I can not/no longer continue my studies.
This
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 is because, by the time I got enrolled, I was unemployed. But, as I informed you
last
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 week, since the beginning of November I started a part-time job as
waitress
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a waitress
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 and bartender at the Ritz Hotel.
This
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 job will not only allow me to support my
universtiy
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university
/university studies next year, but will give me the opportunity to gain valuable, experience for a future post. Taking into account that the course of "hotel manager" I was involved in is connected with the practice I am currently doing, I would like you to suggest that, in order to not to
loose
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lose
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/lose my points, the school could consider
this
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 experience as a part of the final exam. In
this
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 case, I could
suscribe
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subscribe
/subscribe
in
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apply
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/to a new edition of the course, and attend only the syllabus related
with
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to
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 the theoretical subjects.
In addition
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, I consider that with the experience I could gain from my actual duty, my contribution to the institution in a new release of
this
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 academic offer would be a must, in case you are considering
to
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apply
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hiring new professors to deliver these studies. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours, sincerely, Mike Thompson

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language
Ensure correct word choice to convey the exact meaning, such as using 'lose' instead of 'loose' and 'subscribe to' instead of 'subscribe in'.
structure
Consider breaking down long paragraphs into smaller sections to maintain a clear focus on individual points, like dividing explanations of your situation and your request.
tone
The letter has a clear and polite tone, which is suitable for the audience.
convention
The greeting and closing are both appropriate and well-constructed, showing good command of formal letter conventions.
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