Some people says we should plant trees on free space jn city and town while some says that we should do construction. Do you agree or disagree?
Few individuals argue that
authorithies
should plant Correct your spelling
authorities
trees
in free spaces in city junctions and town
, Fix the agreement mistake
towns
where as
others believe that space should be utilised for construction. I firmly disagreeCorrect your spelling
whereas
,
that available space should not be used for constructing or developing anything. Remove the comma
apply
instead
used for planing
Correct your spelling
planting
trees
.
Firstly
, Individuals of current
generation and people from the past have Add an article
the current
spolied
the environment Correct your spelling
spoiled
by
actions Change preposition
through
such
as deforestation and constructing industries to maximum
solely profits. which results in ozone layer depletion, reducing oxygen levels and carbon levels are Replace the word
maximise
raising
. Correct your spelling
rising
due to
this
Correct determiner usage
these
actions
individuals will lack pure Add a comma
actions,
air
to breath
and Replace the word
breathe
taking
polluted Wrong verb form
take
air
into lungs
which Correct pronoun usage
their lungs
causing
many Wrong verb form
causes
harmfull dieases
Correct your spelling
harmful diseases
asthama
and respiratory disease. for Correct your spelling
asthma
a
Correct article usage
apply
instant
, Replace the word
instance
due to
insufficient trees
in delhi
, pollution levels are raised and a layer of polluted Change the capitalization
Delhi
air
developed
in Wrong verb form
develops
Correct article usage
the atmostsphere
atmostsphere
. which takes Correct your spelling
atmosphere
few
weeks to clear. by breathing Correct article usage
a few
these
polluted Correct determiner usage
this
air
many children
are affected by critical respiratory diseases.
Secondly
, by cutting down trees
and constructing buildings we are destroying natural
habitat of animals, small living creatures and humans. birds in the Add an article
the natural
air
will have no place to rest. furthermore
, children
will have no place to play under the trees
and will loose
connection with nature. by which, birds Replace the word
lose
willl
soon Correct your spelling
will
be deteriorate
from Change the verb form
be deteriorated
be deteriorating
this
world and children
will not know what its
like playing under the Replace the word
it's
it is
trees
.
In conclusion, tress has
to be planted in free spaces which will Correct subject-verb agreement
have
inturn
release pure Correct your spelling
in turn
air
to breath
and we shall have good Replace the word
breathe
healths
. Fix the agreement mistake
health
furthermore
, natural
habitat of animals will not be destroyed and Add an article
the natural
children
will experiance
nature and Correct your spelling
experience
will
develop connections with Verb problem
apply
surroundings
.Correct pronoun usage
their surroundings
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task achievement
Ensure your introduction clearly presents both viewpoints and your stance more precise. Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
coherence cohesion
Improve paragraph coherence by connecting ideas using more varied and logical transitional phrases.
task achievement
Use specific examples to support your points more effectively. Avoid general statements for a stronger argument.
task achievement
The essay covers both viewpoints and firmly presents the writer's stance.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear introduction and conclusion, aiding the reader's understanding.
task achievement
There are relevant examples, such as the specific mention of pollution in Delhi.