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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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The
two
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chart
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illustrates
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illustrate
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development
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the development
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 of roads
nearby
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near
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 the
city
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 hospital from 2007 to 2010.
Overall
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, around the
city
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hospital
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hospitals
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 improved remarkably.
A
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 closer look,
bus
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the bus
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 stop was removed from
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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 and
two
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roundabout
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roundabouts
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 were added to
hospital
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the hospital
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road side
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roadside
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. In 2007,
cark
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Cark Park
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park
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 was used
both
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by both
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public
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the public
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 and staff.
However
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,
public
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a public
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 car
park
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 was built adjoining the
city
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 hospital.
Thus
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,
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the
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old car
park
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 was allowed only for hospital staff. Across
to
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from
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 the staff car
park
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,
bus
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a bus
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 station was built which
connect
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connects
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two
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roundabout
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roundabouts
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. Ring
road
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 and
city
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road
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were remained
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remained
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.
Two
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 figures were not developed.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words two, city, road, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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