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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of families in the US by their annual
income
 in different
year
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years
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 2007, 2011 and 2015
Overall
, it
clear
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is clear
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 that most
of
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apply
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household
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households
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 gain more
income
while
 less than
fourth
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a fourth
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 of the households acquire less amount of
the
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income
.
Whereas
middle
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middle-income
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income
 families were steady
among
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in
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 all three years. Around 29
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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people earned
highest
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the highest
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income
 by 2007 and it increased to 36 million by 2015. Steady
in
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figures among all three years in people who receive between 75,000 and 99,999 dollars and middle incomes. The numbers of households gain the least
income
they
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mostly fluctuated between just under 26
millions
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million
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 by 2007 and suddenly rose just above 28
millions
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million
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 by 2011 and at the
ends
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end
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 of 2015 it
stay
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stayed
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 at around 27
millions
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million
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. The chart
saw
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shows
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 a huge difference between middle and highest
income
 and how it
increase
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increased
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by
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over
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 the years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words income, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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