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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #families #country #income #summaries #features #comparisons
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 shows bar charts the information about weekly
spend
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spending
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 for
family
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families
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 from 1960 to 2018 . It is clear from the graph that we had
increase
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an increase
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the
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in the
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 per cent
in
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of
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the
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food
 .
Besied
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 we had
decrease
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a decrease
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 per cent .
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 what is shown ,
food
at
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 1968
is
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increase
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, the reason for the
increase
 is
due to
 they eat
food
everday
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every
 at least 3 times in one day
wich
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which
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why
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is why
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 they had
energay
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energy
.
Also
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the
food
keep
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thier
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their
 bodies and
wight
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weight
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 in check In
additon
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addition
, if there did not eat their mind would be adverse .
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 , per sent trend for leisure
at
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increase
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increased
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comparison
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in comparison
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1968
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to 1968
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 ,
wich
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which
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 why before they
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had
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 a lot of business there most did it to stay
a lived
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alive
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, Not only that In acaient time they
was
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were
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 busy with
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work to get the money for their life . So ,
this
 reason why there
did
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 not have a many time
of
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 leisure .
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 , the
transport
 from 1968 to 2018 there had
a
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littel
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little
 changes in the
ternd
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trend
 per cent figure , it was
transport
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a transport
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 decrease
at
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in
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 1968
comparsion
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comparison
 with
increase
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an increase
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transport
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in transport
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at
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in
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 2018 ,,,, which why the reason did not
goes
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any where
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anywhere
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 in the past but
nowdays
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nowadays
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 there go anywhere and a many of places is due . To sum
uo
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up
, we could say that a lot of things
changes
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have changed
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to
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for
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better
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the better
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 and we use
the
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food
 weekly more than before
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 , the
transport
now days
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nowadays
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 the used for it
increase
 more than before unlike
the
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in the
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 old days and every things is
develop
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developed
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words increase, food, transport with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • income
  • consumer habits
  • percentage
  • cost of living
  • discretionary spending
  • inflation-adjusted
  • financial priorities
  • budget allocation
  • socioeconomic changes
  • technological advancements
  • housing and utilities
  • goods and services
  • gain insight into
  • luxuries vs. necessities
  • trend analysis
  • significant increase/decrease
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