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Test 1: The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Test 1: The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph
despicts
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depicts
 the
dinamics
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dynamics
 of prices with
percentage
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percentages
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 for
each
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every
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 3 metals per month in 2014.
Overall
, it is evident that the
costs'
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costs
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 ratio in copper and zinc are mostly
same
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the same
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 at the beginning and end of the
year
 ,
while
nikel's
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Nikel's
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 price showed the most dramatic decrease over the same period shown. Looking at the line graph in more detail, the proportion of zinc price had escalated from 1% to 3% before dropping
drasticly
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drastically
 to -1% during
next
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the next
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 4
month
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months
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, until June. A steady decline is observed in the price of copper until June. During the rest of the
year
, the cost of both
metal
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metals
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 changes in a similar
tend
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trend
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, reaching similar figures to the prices at the beginning of the
year
 (copper 1.5%, zinc 2%). Regarding
nickel's
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nickel
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Add a comma
prise,
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prise
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price
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 there was
significant
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a significant
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 fall from 6% in January to 1% in March, by 5% by followed a fluctuation during
next
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the next
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 2
month
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months
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 until May. The figure decreased dramatically to -3% in May, which
that
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apply
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is the
least
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lowest
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 ratio of the
year
. In
next
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the next
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 4 months the proportion of nickel prices fluctuated around -2% and
finally
,
this
 figure rose to 1%
at the end
 of 2014.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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