The table below shows the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The chart shows the results of a survey asking visitors how satisfied they are with their visit during the same two periods.
The pie charts illustrate the results of visitor
satisfactory
surveys within two periods, before the Replace the word
satisfaction
museum
went through Use synonyms
refurbishment
and after the Use synonyms
refurbishment
. Use synonyms
Overall
, the customer satisfaction has increased Linking Words
due to
the new Linking Words
museum
environment.
Use synonyms
Last
year before the renovation, the Linking Words
satisfactory
level was quite low. There were 40 and 10 people Replace the word
satisfaction
felt
displeased and very dissatisfied with the Correct pronoun usage
who felt
museum
services, respectively. Use synonyms
Thus
, only 15 visitors were very satisfied and 30 who felt content, clearly lost against the Linking Words
unfavorable
evaluation. Change the spelling
unfavourable
However
Linking Words
this
year, Linking Words
fortunately
the Add the comma(s)
fortunately,
refurbishment
of the Use synonyms
museum
encourages Use synonyms
the
better services and Correct article usage
apply
better
environment for the customers. The results Correct article usage
a better
shows
that the satisfaction quantity Change the verb form
show
rise
to approximately 60% from Replace the word
rose
last
year, with 40 visitors Linking Words
feel
the Wrong verb form
feeling
museum
services fulfilling and 35 others Use synonyms
find
the Wrong verb form
finding
museum
enjoyable. Use synonyms
On the contrary
, the dissatisfaction level Linking Words
drop
to only 20 customers.
Wrong verb form
dropped
To sum up
, the comparison between Linking Words
two
charts shows that the Correct article usage
the two
satisfactory
level increased after the Replace the word
satisfaction
museum
Use synonyms
refurbishment
. Use synonyms
Hence
, the Linking Words
museum
renovation has a great effect Use synonyms
to
the Change preposition
on
visitors
satisfaction.Change to a genitive case
visitor's
visitors'
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