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The bar chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010.
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The
bar
chart
 illustrates five different consumer goods and
its
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their
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 expenditures in two countries. Consumer goods are cars, computers, books, perfume and cameras and the countries are
the
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apply
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France
 and the
Uk
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UK
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.
Overall
, most of the expenditures
made
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are made
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 by the
Uk
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UK
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.
However
the
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France
 still spent more
in
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on
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 two
group
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groups
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 of items, computers and perfume.
According to
 the
bar
chart
, the
Uk
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UK
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 spent more than 450,000 pounds
for
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on
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 cars, which is the peak number in
this
chart
. Unlike the
Uk
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UK
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, there is no particular item the
France
 spent more than 400,000 pounds.
Moreover
, not only
peak
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peaks
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 in the
bar
chart
 but
also
 the lowest amount of money spent by the
Uk
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UK
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to
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on
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 perfume.
Furthermore
, the
Uk
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UK
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 side of the
bar
chart
 has more
flactucated
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fluctuation
 than
the
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France
. The biggest price gap between the
Uk
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UK
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 and
the
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France
 is in Cameras,
while
the
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apply
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France
 spent 150,000 pounds, the
Uk
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UK
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 spent over 350,000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bar, chart, france, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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