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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four European countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four European countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph depicts the
theft
 per
thousand
vehicles
 in European countries
such
 as Great
Britian
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Britain
, Sweden, France and
Canada
 for a decade from
year
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the year
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 1990 to 1999.
Overall
, No of
cars
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car
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of
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apply
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theft
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thefts
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 in Great Britain stands at
highest
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the highest
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 and cars
got
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apply
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stolen in
Canada
 stands at
bottom
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the bottom
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 in
comparision
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comparison
 with other countries.
Firstly
, most
vehicles
 were stolen in Britain in
span
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the span
a span
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 of ten years, and around an average of 18
thefts
 per
thoushand
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thousand
vehicles
. and
lowest
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the lowest
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thefts
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number of thefts
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were
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apply
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recorded in
Canada
that
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which
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 is around an average of 6
thefts
 per
thousand
vehicles
.
Secoundly
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Secondly
. In France
on
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apply
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an average of 7.5
vehicles
 are
theft
 per
thousand
 and Sweden stands at second place with no of
thefts
 gradually increasing from 6
vehicles
 per
thousand
 to approximately 14 per
thousand
 from year 1990 to 1999. In conclusion,
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the thefts
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thefts
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theft
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 rate has seen
reduction
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a reduction
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for
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in
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 countries
Canada
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like Canada
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, France and Britain from 1990 to 1999.
however
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however,
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theft
are
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is
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 gradually increasing
for
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in
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 Sweden
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Vocabulary: Replace the words theft, thousand, vehicles, canada, thefts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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