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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four European countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four European countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the
theft
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 per
thousand
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vehicles
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 in European countries
such
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 as Great
Britian
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Britain
, Sweden, France and
Canada
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 for a decade from
year
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the year
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 1990 to 1999.
Overall
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, No of
cars
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car
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of
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apply
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theft
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thefts
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 in Great Britain stands at
highest
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the highest
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 and cars
got
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apply
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stolen in
Canada
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 stands at
bottom
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the bottom
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 in
comparision
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comparison
 with other countries.
Firstly
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, most
vehicles
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 were stolen in Britain in
span
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the span
a span
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 of ten years, and around an average of 18
thefts
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 per
thoushand
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thousand
vehicles
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. and
lowest
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the lowest
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thefts
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number of thefts
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were
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apply
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recorded in
Canada
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that
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which
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 is around an average of 6
thefts
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 per
thousand
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vehicles
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.
Secoundly
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Secondly
. In France
on
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apply
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an average of 7.5
vehicles
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 are
theft
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 per
thousand
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 and Sweden stands at second place with no of
thefts
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 gradually increasing from 6
vehicles
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 per
thousand
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 to approximately 14 per
thousand
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 from year 1990 to 1999. In conclusion,
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the thefts
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thefts
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theft
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 rate has seen
reduction
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a reduction
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for
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in
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 countries
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Canada
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like Canada
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, France and Britain from 1990 to 1999.
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however
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however,
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theft
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are
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is
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 gradually increasing
for
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in
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 Sweden
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Vocabulary: Replace the words theft, thousand, vehicles, canada, thefts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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