The given graph illustrates the figure related to the attendance of visitors to 4 different tourist destinations in the Uk in 1981 and 1999.
The given graph illustrates the figure related to the attendance of
visitors
to 4 different tourist destinations in the Uk
in 1981 and 1999.
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UK
Overall
, museums and galleries constantly attracted the highest number
of tourists in both two years while
the wildlife parks and zoos witnessed the lowest percentage of visitors
. Notably, the number
of visitors
to all attractions in the latter was approximately doubling the previous year.
At the outset of the period, the museums and galleries boasted the highest proportion of attendance with 48% and then
this
figure showed a downward trend to 38% after 18 years. Whereas
registered a decrease in the number
of visitors
, these places still remained to be
higher than all others compared in the survey. Verb problem
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By contrast
, wildlife parks became the most unpopular destination with just 4% of tourists. While
it registered an increase in 1999 to 9%, this
figure still hit the lowest point among surveyed places.
In terms of theme park
, its percentages reached the second position with 32% in 1981 and after an upward trajectory, the proportion Fix the agreement mistake
parks
just
lower than wildlife parks and zoos a margin of 1%.Eventually, the Add a missing verb
was just
number
of tourists attended
Correct pronoun usage
who attended
to
historic houses and monuments stayed unchanged in both two years, approximately 16%.Change preposition
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