The graph below shows the reported number of cases of influenza in people over 65 in a certain village in the UK from 1985 to 1995
The given line graph illustrates how many
people
who over
65 are suffering from flu in certain countryside in the UK
In general, Add a missing verb
are over
it is clear that
the number of people
who were suffering from flu increased gradually in 3 years. However
it reached a peak in the middle of the decade, there was a slight decline till at
the end of the period
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apply
To begin
with, the amount of adults who over
65 in the UK went up moderately between 1985 and 1995. There was Add a missing verb
are over
then
a downward trend in 1988. But it rised
sharply from 1989 to 1991 with about 75 Correct your spelling
raised
rose
rises
people
. At that time, the numerous of humans in 1991 was be
at a record level compared to any other year.
In 1982, there was a downward tendency to 60 Unnecessary verb
apply
people
and remained stable until 1993. It fluctuated from 1993 to 1985 and the majority of people
who over
65 in certain Add a missing verb
were over
village
in the UK decreased slightly to 60 Fix the agreement mistake
villages
people
again at the end
of the periodSubmitted by chartakinnovation on
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