The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2006 to the present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparasions where relevant

The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2006 to the present.

 

 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparasions where relevant
The line graph illustrates the figure of
books
read by
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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at starmouth school between 2006 and 2012.
Overall
, the
number
of boys increased sharply in 2012,
while
girls who read
book
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books
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decreased rapidly in the same year.
It is clear that
, the
number
of gentlemen who read
books
by merely 50 in 2009.
Then
, the
number
started to increase
about
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80 in the year 2010. In 2011, there was a dramatic
rose
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to just over 100.
Moreover
, its annual
nomber
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number
of boys who read
books
a rocket of 40. Looking in more detail,
at
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in
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the first year, the
number
of girls who read
books
almost
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20.
Nevertheless
, there was a climb of 40 in 2010.
Finally
,
on
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the following two years, there was a sudden drop
around
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80. The figure
of
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for
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both
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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nearly
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was nearly
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100 in 2011. The
number
of boys were more than girls in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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