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Part 1. The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Part 1. The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the proportion of school children learning to play piano, guitar, drums and violin through the years 2005,2010 and 2015.
Overall
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, the highest percentage of children who learned guitar
in
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was in
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 2015,
while
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 the lowest percentage was violin in the same year.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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