Part 1. The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the proportion of school children learning to play piano, guitar, drums and violin through the years 2005,2010 and 2015.

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, the highest percentage of children who learned guitar

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the lowest percentage was violin in the same year.

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Part 1. The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Imagine you had a disappointing experience at a restaurant and would like to address your concerns. Write a letter to the restaurant manager expressing your dissatisfaction and outlining the issues you encountered.

It is widely believed that children of different levels of intelligence should be taught together, while others think that more intelligent children should be taught separately. Discuss and present your opinion.

Do the benefits of artificial intelligence outweigh the potential risks?

Young children have a special talent for language learning. Children should be taught other languages at an early age.