The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per peron of 11.5 litres.)

The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per peron of 11.5 litres.)
The table illustrates the amount of water
cost
each person should allocate in one day, compared to the five countries.
Overall
,
it is clear that
Tanzania and Uganda take a large
cost
, which
account
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for high percentages in daily wages.
In contrast
, the
UK
and the
UK
's water prices are cheaper and the proportions of daily
wage
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wages
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are quite low. Focusing on Tanzania and Uganda,
daily
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the daily
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cost
per person is quite high. The former's
cost
is 6.4
cents
, which accounts for 5.7% of
average
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the average
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daily
wage
.
Similarly
, Uganda's people are required to pay 3.2% of
total
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the total
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daily
wage
, which is 4.1
cents
. Turning to the remains, Pakistan's figure is 1.76
cents
, followed by the
UK
at 1.3
cents
and the US at 0.85
cents
. For a proportion of average daily
wage
,
however
, there are clearly differences in these countries.
While
Pakistan's number is 1.1%, the
UK
accounts for 0.013% and the lowest number is seen in the US at only 0.006%.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, uk, wage, cents with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • daily cost
  • per person
  • minimum daily requirement
  • litres
  • comparison
  • assessment
  • analysis
  • evaluation
  • impact
  • citizens
  • relationship
  • availability
  • resources
  • measures
  • manage
  • implications
  • health
  • hygiene
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