The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram
illustration
how Replace the word
illustrates
sugar
is made from sugar
cane.
Overall
, there are seven stages, beginning with the growing of sugar
canes from stage
1 and also
ending in stage
7 with the drying and cooling of same.
Firstly
, from the first stage
, sugar
cane is planted and is allowed to mature between 12-18 months. Further
, on
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in
stage
2 it is harvested either manually or by using a tractor. Furthermore
, it goes through a process
of being crushed in a machine for the extraction of its juice which is then
poured into limestone
filter where the juice goes through a purification Correct article usage
a limestone
process
.
In stage
5, we have the evaporator process
where the juice is then
heated to become a syrup. Moreover
, the syrup goes through the centrifuge stage
where sugar
crystals are separated from syrup. Finally
, in the last
and the seven
Correct your spelling
seventh
stage
, the Change to a plural noun
stages
sugar
faces a drying and cooling process
where the sugar
is finally
dried and cool and is ready for use or packing.Submitted by pncubeterera on
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