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The table below shows population figures for 4 countries for 2003 and projected figures for 2025 and 2050.

The table below shows population figures for 4 countries for 2003 and projected figures for 2025 and 2050.
#population #figures #countries
The given table indicates how the
figure
 for
population
 changed from 2003 to 2050 in four different nations, namely,
Argentina
,
Indonesia
, Italy and
Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
.
Overall
, the
figure
 for
population
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the population
a population
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 in
Argentina
,
Indonesia
 and
Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
increase
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increased
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while
 the number
of
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apply
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that
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apply
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in others witness a decrease during the period. In 2003, the
figure
 for
population
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the population
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in
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of
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Indonesia
 was 238
million
and
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apply
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8 times as high as that
for
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of
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Argentina
 which
its
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is
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recored
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record
recorded
 at 34
million
.
Moreover
, the data on
population
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the population
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in
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of
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 Italy outnumbers that
for
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of
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Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
with
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by
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 a margin of 6
million
. The
figure
 for
population
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the population
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 in both
Argentina
 and Italy will decrease to 48
million
 and 47 in that order,
while
 the data on that for
Indonesia
 and
Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
 will increase slightly to 274
million
 and 52
million
 respectively.
In addition
, after 25 years, there is an increase to 62
million
 and 312
million
 in the
figure
 for
that
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apply
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in
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apply
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Argentina
 and
Indonesia
,
while
 the data for that in Italy will continually go down to 45
million
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, population, argentina, indonesia, republic, korea, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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