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The table below shows population figures for 4 countries for 2003 and projected figures for 2025 and 2050.

The table below shows population figures for 4 countries for 2003 and projected figures for 2025 and 2050.
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The given table indicates how the
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population
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 changed from 2003 to 2050 in four different nations, namely,
Argentina
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,
Indonesia
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, Italy and
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Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
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.
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, the
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population
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the population
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 in
Argentina
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,
Indonesia
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 and
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Republic
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the Republic
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Korea
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while
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 the number
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that
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in others witness a decrease during the period. In 2003, the
figure
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the population
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in
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Indonesia
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 was 238
million
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and
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8 times as high as that
for
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Argentina
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 which
its
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is
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recored
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record
recorded
 at 34
million
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.
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, the data on
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population
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the population
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in
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 Italy outnumbers that
for
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of
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Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
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with
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 a margin of 6
million
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. The
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population
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the population
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 in both
Argentina
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 and Italy will decrease to 48
million
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 and 47 in that order,
while
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 the data on that for
Indonesia
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 and
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Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea
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 will increase slightly to 274
million
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 and 52
million
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 respectively.
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, after 25 years, there is an increase to 62
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 and 312
million
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 in the
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that
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in
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Argentina
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 and
Indonesia
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,
while
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 the data for that in Italy will continually go down to 45
million
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, population, argentina, indonesia, republic, korea, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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