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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar chart illustrates the produced electricity and the usage of that over the main ten countries in 2014. It is a glance that the highest production and consumption has been taken by China. By
present
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 year, their electricity generation was approximately similar to their usage. Even,
United
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the United
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 States has taken the major kWh of manufacturing and utilization, they were unable to surpass China. It is highlighted that, except
China
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for China
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 and the United States, other countries are failing to present the competition between the top ratings.
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 to that, Germany was the only country which had to
obtained
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 power more than their production. There were around 60 billion kWh gaps between the power generation and the utilization. By observing the mentioned details, it can
be conclude
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 that
,
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apply
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 almost all countries were able to manage
the
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apply
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electricity consumption by using
own
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their own
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 manufacturing
of
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in
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 2024.
Further
, France, Brazil and Canada have been depicted as
approximately
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having approximately
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 equal manufacturing ability and
using
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use
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 capacity. Germany and Korea have reported minor values over the year 2014.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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