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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.
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The map shows us what happened to the village between 1995 and the present time.
Overall
Linking Words
, we can see that now there is more population and because of that, we have more houses. and there are a few changes that happened in the farmland and the forest
park
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, in the present time we can notice that the market, fishing port, and shop have been replaced with other utilities. in 1995 we had 12 houses but now we have 16 with a new street serving two houses, the farmland and the forest
park
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 got demolished and replaced with a big
park
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 that has a golf field, and a tennis court, and for the side of the sea we had 5 shops which got replaced with 5 restaurants, and 5 fish markets that
also
Linking Words
 got replaced but with apartments, there is no more a fishing port, but the cafe is still there, the hotel has built a car
park
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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