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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.
#maps #show #bookstore
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The given maps depict
that
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the evolution of
bookstore
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bookstores
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 in 2000 and now Inclusively, the bookstore had notable changes in terms of verities
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books
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of books
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. On the whole, the bookshop had only
fiction
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book
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books
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 at the top of the map.It has travel, new
books
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 and
service
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a service
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 desk on it
is leftmost
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left
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. It had art, hobbies,
cookery
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and cookery
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 in it is
centere
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centred
centre
, and
non-
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a non-fiction
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fiction
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book
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bookshelf
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shelf
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 opposite to
fiction
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shelf
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. It had another
fiction
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shelf
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 in the corner of the  map and it
adjacent
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 to the other
fiction
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shelf
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. Now,the bookstore
have
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books
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 of different genres, including art, hobbies, cookery and
fiction
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.The
fiction
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books
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 were replaced by non-
fiction
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books
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 on the corner
shelf
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.In the middle of the map there were art,hobbies and cookery
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shelf
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shelves
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 it   changed to three tables.The cafe was replaced by non-
fiction
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. The entrance, travel, new
books
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 and service desk remained unchanged.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, fiction, shelf with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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