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The plans below the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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This
 report derives from the schemes which enumerate the transition of the site of an
airport
 between
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present and future, after the reformation. A glance at the illustration clearly reveals that the
airport
 underwent
expansion
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an expansion
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 of its size and became
modernize
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modernised
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 and
sophisticate
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sophisticated
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 in facilities.
Furthermore
, the gates which
were
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used to be 8 augmented to 18 and
sky
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the sky
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 train replaced the walkway for
the
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apply
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convenience.
Also
, the number of entrances
of
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for
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the
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apply
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departures and arrivals doubled to separate the congestion of the
airport
. To be specific,
arrivals
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the arrivals
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 section
also
 renovated itself followed by
new
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a new
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 car hire area and facilities
such
 as
ATM
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an ATM
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 and Cafe.
Moreover
,
departures
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the departures
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 area
also
 experienced redevelopment including the replacement of
check-in
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the check-in
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 counter and cafe.
Also
,
bag
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the bag
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 drop sector
added
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was added
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 to the place here.
Finally
, the shops located between the gates and security passport control area
are
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will be
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 accessible for
airport
 users in the future.
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task achievement
The essay provides a mostly complete response to the task, but there are minor inaccuracies and areas that could be elaborated further. Make sure to highlight key changes clearly and avoid repetition for higher scores.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a clear and logical structure throughout the essay. The essay would benefit from more precise linking words or phrases that smoothly connect ideas and paragraphs. Adding a conclusion summarizing the overall changes will enhance coherence.
task achievement
The essay provides a comprehensive overview of the changes in the airport layout and facilities, covering most of the main features.
coherence cohesion
The content is fairly well-organized, and the points are generally well-supported by the description of the developments.

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