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The graph below shows the population of foxes on four different Californian islands between 1994 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the population of foxes on four different Californian islands between 1994 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph illustrates the
population
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 of
foxes
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on
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 four different areas namely San Miguel, Santa Cruz, Santa Rosa and Santa Catalina between 1994 and 2014. There was a significant decline in the year 1994 to 2000
on
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 all four
islands
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. These island’s
foxes
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population
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 hit the lowest point in 2000 with all
islands
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 having less than 100
foxes
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.
This
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 number already makes the species endangered and could lead to
extinction
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the extinction
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 of
foxes
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 on the island.
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, these
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foxes
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fox's
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population
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increase
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 sharply in the
year
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years
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 2002-2010. Most of the
islands
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increase
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increased
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 gradually in 2010-2014 with San Miguel
remained
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remaining
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 constant. Most of the
population
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 peaks in the year of 2014. Based on the graph it looks like these
foxes
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 will
increase
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 even more in the future. In conclusion, the
foxes
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 on four different Californian
islands
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 almost undergo an extinction on the island.
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, a dramatic
increase
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 happened and most of the island
has
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 more
foxes
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 in
the
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2014.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, foxes, islands, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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