Artists need an certain amounts of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should gave total freedom to express any thought and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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been working with
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limited
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them
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less productive.
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believe that
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in order to be more creative rather than ordinary.
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how important is for
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Artists
have
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a
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real
freedom
to express
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themselves better
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they ideas
nowadays
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in order to
show
them
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in their
job
.  It's important give to the
artists
more places in the
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streets
and public areas to express their ideas. It's mean that the
governament
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government
should
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a unique space for the artist to
show
their
job
to the community.
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, some people think that urban expression
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the
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public area unatractive
due to
the
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artists
sometime
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sometimes
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use the more crewed places and principal areas
such
as squires to express themselves. I consider
that is
importan
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important
give to the artist more space in the cities to create a
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that could
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the tourism industry in the country.
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other
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hand, is
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important
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artists
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enough
freedom
but some people believe that they have to be careful with the way and the audience that consume their art. Every
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nation
has a different age for their children
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an adults
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.
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people argue that
no
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everyone
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to see their
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because some
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the
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topics
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nowadays
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involve an controversial
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such
as
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,
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drugs
, sexual
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among
others. it's a
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high
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issue to discover the correct way that
art
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artists
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show
their work nowadays
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internet
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is in the
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of everyone. I consider that
artis
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artists
would have more
freedom
to express their
job
nowadays but I
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truly
believe that
the
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they
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have to be
carful
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careful
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to
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choice
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what is their audience and what is more important to
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and why
no
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not
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. there is no doubt that art is one of the most important ways
to
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the
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human
are been
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expressed
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their ideas and
believes
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though
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through
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the
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time.
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I want to
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highlight
that
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type of
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makes our society be more close and it's one of the most
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thing
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that we have as
a humans
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humans
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.
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language
To enhance clarity, the essay should focus on polishing grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. This will help convey your points more effectively and reduce misunderstandings.
task response
Providing stronger and more varied examples can reinforce your arguments and make the essay more convincing. Try to use specific, real-world instances where freedom has positively impacted artists or where restrictions have stifled their creativity.
coherence and cohesion
While your main points are clear, aim to elaborate on your arguments to provide a deeper analysis and connect ideas more fluidly. This can improve the overall logical structure and coherence of the essay.
structure
Your essay begins and ends with clear statements of your position, providing a solid framework for your arguments.
task response
The essay addresses multiple facets of the topic, showing understanding of different perspectives. This breadth is commendable.

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