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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 line graph illustrates the data
of
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on
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 the manufacturing level of
diffrent
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different
 natural sources in the United Kingdom from 1981 to 2000 by
energy
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 unit.
Overall
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, we can see that
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petroleum had the highest production level, followed by
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natural gas and coal approximately
same
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the same
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number of
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total production.
According to
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 what is shown,
the
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petroleum
had
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started from nearly 90 million tons,
then
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, it reached
it
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 peak between 1984 and 1987
by
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with
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 nearly 140 million tons of oil.
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,
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 natural gas was stable until nearly 1991,
then
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 it showed a smooth
growing
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.
Moreover
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,
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coal was
stabel
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stable
,
then
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 it showed a sharp decrease and reached
it
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 bottom with around 40
energy
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unit
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units
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, from 1986 it showed a steady decline to
approximatly
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approximately
 35
energy
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unit
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units
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.
To sum up
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, we could say that the great
britain
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Britain
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 depends highly on petroleum as a leading root of
energy
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,
in addition
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of
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 coal and natural gas.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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