Nowadays, many animal species are becoming extinct. Some people believe that countries and individuals must solve this problem. Others believe that human beings are more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Human is not the only
one
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apply
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living thing
in
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our planet. There are
also
beautiful creatures on the earth especially
animal
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animals
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which
consists
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consist
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a
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variety of species , complexities and habitats. Unfortunately, the number of animals
are
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decreasing now
due to
many factors
such
as climate changes from global warming, forest devastation that ruins their habitat
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task response
Ensure your essay addresses both sides of the argument fully and clearly. Develop your ideas thoroughly and provide comprehensive explanations and examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between your ideas to enhance coherence. Use connectors and linking words to better guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
Add a clear conclusion to summarize your main points and restate your opinion. Ensure your introduction also sets up both sides of the argument clearly.
task response
Your introduction is engaging and sets up the topic well by highlighting the importance of animals and the factors contributing to their extinction.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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