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Some people think that studying history is a waste of time while others think that its essential to learn. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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preferred
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that has significant importance
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introduction
Your essay should begin with a clear and concise introduction that provides a brief overview of the topic and your stance. Consider rephrasing your introduction to be grammatically correct and more engaging.
logical structure
Try to structure your essay more logically. Each paragraph should contain a single main idea that is clearly supported by relevant examples and arguments. This will help improve the logical flow of your essay.
grammar spelling
Work on grammar and spelling to enhance readability and prevent misunderstandings. Proofreading your essay after writing can help catch basic errors.
relevant specific examples
Provide more specific examples to support your points. This will strengthen your arguments and make your essay more persuasive.
task achievement
The essay addresses both viewpoints on the topic, which shows a balanced approach and is a positive aspect of task achievement.
introduction conclusion
The conclusion reiterates the writer's stance, which is good for coherence and cohesion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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