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Your English - speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/sheis doing about celebrating New Year in different countries.

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Dear Karina, I am happy to help you with the questions about celebration a New
Year
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. The New
Year
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 in our country is so important and a lot of people is so exited to celebrate it. Part of people prepare for
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 date a few months ago. They prepare where they will be celebrating or what they will be eating, drinking. We have a lot options how celebrate it, I introduce two the most favorite.
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, the first option: you can spend a time on the mountains. Where you can ski or stay in the spa. And celebrating the New
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 you can enjoy in the hotel, where you can book a ticket for entry and you have celebration without care, because you paid for the eat, drink and fun. The second option: you can stay with friends and family at home. Where you should prepare snack, drinks, fun herself. The favorite part of the day is a fareworks, usually for children. We make a fareworks on the midnight like whole world. Be honest, for me the best option: If I can stay on the mountains. I love downhill skiing, spa,snow. The winter looks different when everything around me is so white. Hopefuly, I helped you and your colleague with the questions about celebration New
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. Warm regards Andrea
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Try to elaborate more on the different traditions and customs related to New Year celebrations in your country. This will provide a fuller picture for your friend’s project.
coherence cohesion
Focus on maintaining a consistent tense throughout your writing. There are a few instances where the tense shifts unnecessarily, which can cause confusion.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to the consistency of your point of view. Avoid switching between first-person (I, me) and third-person (they, people) abruptly, as it affects the flow and clarity of your writing.
task achievement
You have provided clear options for celebrating New Year’s Eve, which showcases good planning and structure in your writing.
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You personalized the letter by adding your preference, which makes the writing more engaging and relatable.

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