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Some people think that going to the gym is the best way to keep fit. Others think that there are many better methods. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The bar chart displays the
propotion
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proportion
 growth in mean property values in Algeria, China, and Argentina from 2007 to 2010.
Overall
,
while
 the property prices decreased gradually in Algeria, they increased significantly in
china
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China
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. During the same period Property average prices fluctuated wildly in Argentina. In Algeria, house values dropped steadily from nearly 6% in 2007 to just below 3% in 2010, being the second highest
at the end
 of the recorded time after they were the highest at the beginning.
However
, the
chinese
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Chinese
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 figure rose significantly during the time span from just below 2% in 2007 to just over 6% in 2010, being the highest trend
at the end
. The
Argentian
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Argentinian
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 trend increased slightly from just above 3% in 2007 to approximately 5% in 2008. After that, the trend went through a significant reduction period. It dropped from nearly 5% in 2008 to just above 1% in 2009, and
then
 it started increasing slightly to almost 2% in 2010, being the lowest among the recorded countries.
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introduction conclusion present
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logical structure
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complete response
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complete response
The essay describes the trends in property values in Algeria, China, and Argentina during the specified period, which answers the task appropriately.
relevant specific examples
The use of specific data points from the chart to describe the changes in property values in each country demonstrates a good understanding of the task requirements.
logical structure
The analysis of trends in each country is clearly organized in separate paragraphs, which helps in maintaining clarity.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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