Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives, so it is a waste of time to read news in the newspaper and watch news program on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Traditional food offerings in Japanese restaurants,

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the quality of ingredients. It was not until the integration of Western food chains, especially McDonald’s, into Japan that

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national culture was gradually shifted to the faster and more simplistic service, contributing to the loss of unique national identities in the culinary domain.)

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task achievement

Ensure that the essay is a complete response to the question, including an introduction, a well-structured argument, and a conclusion that directly relates to the topic of news and its relevance to people's lives.

coherence cohesion

Refine and articulate the main points clearly and make sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details and examples relevant to the question.

coherence cohesion

Develop a clear logical structure, with smooth transitions between sentences and paragraphs. Your points should flow naturally to guide the reader.

language use

The sentence demonstrates a sophisticated vocabulary and a good grasp of complex sentence structure.

task achievement

The example provided about the integration of Western food chains in Japan adds depth and specificity to the writing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

62 words

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Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives, so it is a waste of time to read news in the newspaper and watch news program on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and tradition methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.

In this day and age,it is considered by a plethora of individuals that,adults had better follow the pattern of old people others consider that it is natural instinct for teenagers to challenge what older people say.This essay will outline both arguments,and then conclusion will be drawn.

can you tell me the sequence of instant noodle manufacturing?