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Band 4

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree whit this statement?

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Despite the disappearance of different
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 every year.Some
people
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life will be simple if there are a small number of
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.In my perspective,
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 disagree completely with
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 statement because of the numerous advantages of having more
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languages
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globalisation and the westernisation of
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European
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Europe
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 and
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,Which have forced
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languages
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 threat to the
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, the language in every country is significant to make the
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, every country should have specific words and
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 to be distinctive and well-known
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her
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 own language.
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people
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characteristic
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 their
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 vocabulary.
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 community famous with their
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speech
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languages
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To illustrate, learning and understanding the other speeches will facilitate
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communication between the societies. in conclusion,I personally disagree with the opinion that with only several
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 that exist in the
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,life will be easier.I believe that the variety of
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richness
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 civilisation and they should be passed
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task response
Your introduction captures the essence of the argument; however, it could be more coherent. Simplify sentences and ensure subject-verb agreement.
coherence cohesion
Improve coherence by ensuring a smooth link between paragraphs and providing clear topic sentences. Use cohesive devices but avoid overusing them.
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Your main ideas are clear and relevant to the topic.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-structured with logical sequencing and clear paragraphs.
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You have demonstrated a good understanding of the topic and provided meaningful points.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic diversity
  • cultural heritage
  • global communication
  • economic integration
  • homogenization
  • unique perspectives
  • translation tools
  • educational platforms
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • cognitive benefits
  • problem-solving skills
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