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Some people think it’s better to choose friend s who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them

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Some individuals think it is
prefer
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preferable
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 to select
friends
 who constantly have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it is righteous to have
friends
 who
time
 to
time
 disagree with them.
this
 essay will discuss and articulate both aspects,
along with
 my opinion relevant examples and a logical conclusion.
To begin
 with, in current days everyone has a right to choose a
friend
. There are people who like to spend
time
 with a
friend
 that he or she has the same character or
behavior
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.
The recent
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Recent
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 studies illustrate that the genetic human blood plays a big role in making decisions, and gives the command to choose the right
friend
.
For example
, if
your
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you're
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 going to give an exam and there are multiple choice questions and you do not know which one to select
then
 there only the feelings will work, and those feelings are related to genetics.
Similarly
, the person chooses the correct
friend
.
On the other hand
, some believe that it is good to have
friends
 who sometimes are against them. there are
friends
 who support their buddy but not in everything and that should not be considered.
Such
 as a
friend
 can not be on his
friend
's side most of the
time
 even if his guilty.
Furthermore
, the family is judgmental towards the person, suppose if they do not like him or her they suggest to be apart from each other.
In addition
, parents do not like unethical practices in terms of personality. In my perspective, does not matter the person's good or bad attitude unless he is sincere or honest and follows the right way.
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coherence cohesion
You have a good introduction that outlines the topic and what the essay will discuss.
task achievement
Your essay covers both perspectives on the topic, which shows a balanced approach.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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