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Nowadays people use bicycles less as a form of transport. Why is this the case? What can we do to encourage people to use bicycles more?

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In today's world,
individiuals
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individuals
 do not
use
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 bicycles as much as other
transportation
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 techniques. In my opinion,
people
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 do not
use
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 it much because they do not want to get tired and
also
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 some
countries
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 do not have
roads
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 to
riding
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ride
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 a
bike
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 safely. I believe that
governments
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 should make
roads
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 and implement
laws
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 which protect cyclist rights to encourage
people
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 to
use
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 bikes more. Most individuals go their work by car, train and bus.
However
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,
Some
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in Some
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countries
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such
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 as
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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,
people
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 generally go their
works
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work
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 by
bicycles
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bicycle
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.
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, most
countries
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 do not have specific
roads
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 and
laws
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 for bikers.
Moreover
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,
people
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 do not want to ride a
bike
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 because they do not like the idea of getting sweaty and getting tired.
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, If a worker has to go
his
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to his
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/her job,
worker
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the worker
a worker
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 will
choose
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choose to
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 go there by car or bus, because they do not want to get sweat before
meeting
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a meeting
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 or job.
Hence
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, most individuals do not
use
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 bikes for
transportation
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 method because they do not want to get tired and sweaty.
Moreover
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, in some
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countries
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countries,
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 it is not safe. To encourage
people
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governments
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 should make
roads
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 for cyclists. If they feel safe when they are riding a
bike
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 they might
use
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 it more and more. They have to implement
laws
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 to protect
cyclist
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cyclists
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rigths
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rights
.
For example
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, In some
nations
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nations,
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 riders have to raise their arm
,
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apply
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 if they want to turn. Like they raise their left hand to turn left. These
laws
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 protect
people
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 from accidents.
Furthermore
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, when
people
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saw
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see
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 riding a
bike
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is
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as
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 a safe
transport
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, they will definitely
use
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 it because
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use
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using
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 bicycles to
transport
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 is easier than other
transportation
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 forms.
Therefore
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, If
governments
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 ensure rider's safety,
people
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 will definitely
use
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 it to
transport
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.
To sum up
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,
individiuals
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individuals
 do not ride a
bike
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 so much for
transportation
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 because they believe that it is not
safety
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safe
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 and
also
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 they do not
wnat
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want
 to do physical exercise because it makes
people
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 sweaty and get tired. I argue that
,
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apply
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governments
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 should provide
biker's
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bikers
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 safety with
laws
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 and
roads
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. When they make these changes,
people
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 will certainly want to
transport
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 with bikes.

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conclusion
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task response
The essay addresses the task prompt by discussing the reasons why people use bicycles less and providing solutions to encourage more bicycle use.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable transport
  • cycling infrastructure
  • bike lanes
  • bike-sharing programs
  • traffic calming measures
  • commute
  • subsidies
  • physical exertion
  • environmental benefits
  • safety regulations
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