You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people say that in the modern world, getting old is entirely bad. Others, however, say that life for the elderly nowadays is much better than it was in the past. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. You should write at least 250 words.
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However
people
think that in
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at
this
particular time getting old is totally bad. Others,
say Remove the comma
apply
life
for elderly
is so Correct article usage
the elderly
better
than it was before. In my Correct quantifier usage
much better
opinion
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opinion,
i
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I
compiletly
agree Correct your spelling
completely
with
that older Change preposition
apply
people
have much
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a much
esier
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easier
life
in this
era.
On the one hand, many people
conveced
that getting old is really bad in the Correct your spelling
convinced
modren
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modern
life
. In other word
, Change the wording
another word
other words
aging
will prevent them from doing the thing they love. Football Change the spelling
ageing
player
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players
for example
, when they reach the ages
of 30 becomes more Fix the agreement mistake
age
deficult
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difficult
for
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apply
them
to keep up with younger players, so Correct pronoun usage
apply
ether
they but more effort or they just Correct your spelling
either
retired
. Wrong verb form
retire
Furthermore
, getting old makes you more susceptible to serious diseases and that is
related to the weaknees
in Correct your spelling
weakness
weaknesses
the
immune system Correct article usage
apply
and
because of that old Correct word choice
apply
pepole
will Correct your spelling
people
relay
on Correct your spelling
rely
the
others to take care of them Correct article usage
apply
such
as elderly
home .
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an elderly
the elderly
On the other hand
, it is often belived
that Correct your spelling
believed
life
for elders is much better nowadayes
and Correct your spelling
nowadays
i
agree.As many Change the capitalization
I
people
think in this
era old people
can have an easy life
and that is
related to the development of the tecnology
and the Correct your spelling
technology
improvment
in Correct your spelling
improvement
medicen experinces
. Correct your spelling
medical experiences
For instance
, in the past when someone old get
sick they Change the verb form
gets
have
nothing to do Wrong verb form
had
to
him ,but nowadays there are better doctors and Change preposition
with
medicens
.Correct your spelling
medicines
Moreover
, in this
era old people
do not need to walk in huge destence
to reach Correct your spelling
distance
thier destnation
and that Correct your spelling
their destination
because
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is because
the
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of the
improving
in Replace the word
improvements
the
transportation Correct article usage
apply
such
as the
cars.
In conclusion, Correct article usage
apply
while
people
may vare in Correct your spelling
their
thier
opinion Correct your spelling
their
i
think that getting old is Change the capitalization
I
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something
simething
that we can avoid, but Correct your spelling
something
life
is becoming easier for old people
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clear comprehensive ideas
You should ensure that your ideas are clearly and comprehensively explained. For instance, elaborate on why modern technology and medicine make life easier for the elderly.
complete response
Try to maintain consistent use of formal language and correct grammatical structures. For instance, avoid starting sentences with conjunctions like 'And' and ensure you use the correct subject-verb agreement.
supported main points
Proofread your essay to correct spelling and grammatical errors. For example, 'weaknees' should be 'weakness,' and 'deficult' should be 'difficult.'
relevant specific examples
You provided relevant specific examples, such as the challenges faced by football players as they age.
logical structure
The essay's structure is logical and well-organized, with clear arguments for both views.
introduction conclusion present
You included both an introduction and a conclusion, which helps to frame your discussion and provide a summary of your opinion.
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