You have just won two tickets to a concert and want invite your friend to go with you.Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: •give details about the concert •describe how you won the tickets •explain why you've chosen your friend to go with.

Dear Marjona I hope you are in good health. I am glad to inform you
to
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the live
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includes different types of songs:
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,jazz,pop,rock and
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etc.There
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facilities, especially
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restaurants and shops for everything.
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time I have heard that songs
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by famous people.
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will throw outside
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the
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Book Street and at 7 p.m Well,I understand you came faced with
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how I got those tickets.I won them during the summer camp.As you know, summer camp has been creating new games every year.
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they have been putting big gifts for winners.
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game
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we had to
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songs at the disco so I beat every single opponent. After
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they gave me two tickets for
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the concert
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. Honestly, I don't want to tell about my feelings anyone.
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you are my really best friend.
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we have not met for 3 years and I miss you
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why I have chosen you to go with me. I look forward
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your answer. I think you
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as soon as possible. All my love, Feruzabonu.
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coherence cohesion
There are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect clarity. Consider revising these parts to improve overall readability.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph introduces a single main idea and is structured accordingly. This enhances the logical flow of the letter.
task achievement
You have included all the required details about the concert, how you won the tickets, and the reason for choosing your friend, which addresses the task comprehensively.
task achievement
Your tone is friendly and appropriate for a letter to a friend, which helps make the invitation feel genuine and heartfelt.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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