You have just started a course in a collage which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter: • Introduce yourself • say why you are interested in this sports club • ask some questions about the club
Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing to ask for information about membership in the Snap Sport club which is the nearest private sport club
I am Begoyim and 15 years old. I have been studying college which has no sports facilities.
However
, I always wanted to take part in that course
. But also
I haven't prqcticing
at all yet.
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practising
In addition
to this
, one of the most important cause is, I
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that I
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club is it suits me because I have the ability to play tennis. The first problem is that I am too shy to talk about my interests . So, I never talked to Change preposition
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manager
I would be grateful if you could give me some information about the Add an article
the manager
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course
. Firstly
, I would like to know is cost . I agree with the price , but I want you wouldn't make it too expensive. And secondly
, I would like to know about members. How many members like me want to join the course
? I have a few more questions for you as this
first time attending this
course
. I wonder I you could possibly tell me about amenities. You can contact me on my mobile phone number which is : 883190642
I look forward to hearing from you soon
Yours faithfully
BegoyimSubmitted by omondavlat91 on
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Try to organize your paragraphs better by focusing on one idea per paragraph. This will help improve the logical structure and make your letter easier to read.
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Provide more specific details about why you are interested in the sports club and how it meets your needs. This will enhance your task achievement score.
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Use a more formal and polite tone, especially when making requests or asking questions. This will improve the suitability of your writing tone for the context.
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Your greeting and closing are appropriate for the letter, which helps create a polite and respectful tone.
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You have addressed all the required points in the task, such as introducing yourself, explaining your interest in the sports club, and asking questions about it.