You have just started a course in a collage which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter: • Introduce yourself • say why you are interested in this sports club • ask some questions about the club

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to ask for information about membership in the Snap Sport club which is the nearest private sport club I am Begoyim and 15 years old. I have been studying college which has no sports facilities.
However
, I always wanted to take part in that
course
. But
also
I haven't
prqcticing
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practising
at all yet.
In addition
to
this
, one of the most important cause is,
I
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that I
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am
interesting
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club is it suits me because I have the ability to play tennis. The first problem is that I am too shy to talk about my interests . So, I never talked to
manager
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I would be grateful if you could give me some information about the
course
.
Firstly
, I would like to know is cost . I agree with the price , but I want you wouldn't make it too expensive. And
secondly
, I would like to know about members. How many members like me want to join the
course
? I have a few more questions for you as
this
first time attending
this
course
. I wonder I you could possibly tell me about amenities. You can contact me on my mobile phone number which is : 883190642 I look forward to hearing from you soon Yours faithfully Begoyim
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Try to organize your paragraphs better by focusing on one idea per paragraph. This will help improve the logical structure and make your letter easier to read.
task achievement
Provide more specific details about why you are interested in the sports club and how it meets your needs. This will enhance your task achievement score.
task achievement
Use a more formal and polite tone, especially when making requests or asking questions. This will improve the suitability of your writing tone for the context.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriate for the letter, which helps create a polite and respectful tone.
task achievement
You have addressed all the required points in the task, such as introducing yourself, explaining your interest in the sports club, and asking questions about it.

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