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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Many people say that we have developed into a “throw-away” culture, because we are filling up our environment with so many plastic bags and rubbish that we cannot fully dispose of. To what extent do you agree with this opinion and what measures can you recommend reducing this problem ?

People are destroying the earth unintentionally by throwing all
kind
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 of
plastic
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 and
this
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 essay will examine different measures that can be implemented to mitigate
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 issue.
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with
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 applying lack of
alternative
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 for
plastic
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 is the most
convenience
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 concern. Nowadays people are consuming bunches of
plastic
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 goods, for different
usage
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. But
unfortunately
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 there are no substitutes for them.
for example
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 on newspaper published news that 39%of the production of European factories was made of
plastic
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therefore
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 environment not only should consider a heavy tax for the import of
plastic
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 ,but
also
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 strict regulation for
plastic
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 regulation.
on the other hand
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 ,the government should invest
to
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 changing the consumer culture of people
Beside
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 enhancing support for garbage collection
campaign
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 is another matter which can not be disregarded as well.
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 the
researcher
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researchers
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 are indicating that these campaigns help a lot to remove poison of
plastic
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 derivatives and they help to protect
the
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apply
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nature
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change
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 the conditions towards a
heathier
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healthier
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 life.
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 I realize
the
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that
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 environmentalists are
being changed
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 the condition of nature for the better.
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 I assume that every public is improving their way of recycling.

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task achievement
Your essay addresses the question asked and suggests solutions to the problem mentioned, which is good. However, make sure to fully elaborate on each point made to provide a clearer, more comprehensive response. Including specific examples and data would greatly improve your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a focused topic sentence and that ideas flow logically from one to the next. Avoid combining multiple ideas into a single paragraph without clear distinction.
overall
Proofread your work to correct grammatical errors and improve sentence structure. Additionally, avoid base-level vocabulary where possible; utilize a wider range of vocabulary and sentence structures to demonstrate your language proficiency.
task achievement
Your essay effectively identifies specific measures that can be taken to reduce plastic waste, showing an understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Both an introduction and a conclusion are present, guiding the reader through your points effectively.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disposable products
  • convenience-focused consumer habits
  • single-use plastics
  • fast fashion
  • environmental impact
  • landfill waste
  • pollution
  • harm to wildlife
  • recycling infrastructure
  • decomposition
  • public awareness
  • sustainable living practices
  • governmental regulations
  • biodegradable materials
  • recycling technologies
  • sustainable packaging solutions
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