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Band 1.5

In what way do photos help with remembering specific details or scenes?

People take photos for many reasons, some like photos and some like to capture the photo and more.But the photo has
the
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 different relation with me.
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 I enjoy taking
the the
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pictures
for
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of
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 any memorable events in my life.Let me share an example
Last
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 year, I
haved
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visited
northen
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northern
 Pakistan with my friends and I captured
photo
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 of each and every place
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apply
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Iit
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which
helps
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 me to
remind my
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remember
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 these special memories with my friends. Second,The picture
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help
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 you to
rember
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remember
 the things
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 it helps you to remind the specific scene or detail when the picture is
capturing
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. In conclusion,
Now a days
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the
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photos
plays
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the
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 vital role in every human life and mostly for new generations.

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coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, but could benefit from a stronger introduction and more detailed conclusion. Try expanding these sections to improve the overall structure.
task achievement
There are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasings in your essay. For example, "haved" should be "have" and "remind" should be "remember." Review your work for such errors.
task achievement
Consider developing your points more fully. For example, you mention capturing pictures of a visit to northern Pakistan - you could elaborate on specific places or experiences that were particularly meaningful.
task achievement
You've made a good point about the significance of photos in capturing memories and helping recall specific details.

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