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Band 5

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, there are numerous
number of
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cars
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 on roads in
UK
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the UK
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due to
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 a huge development
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that starts
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starts
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from
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 1888.
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, there is a discussion whether substitutes and legislation for
car s
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cars
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 are required or not. I personally agree that
restriction
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restrictions
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 for vehicles are needed,
as well as
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 boosting other transport methods
such
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 as a bus and a train.
Firstly
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, many
cars
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 on the road could create congestion, which delays the travel time.
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, there is a tax for congestion imposed by the UK government to discourage the usage of
cars
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.
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 leads to
decerased
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decreased
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 on the
high way
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highway
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,
as well as
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 raising the revenue for the government, yielding to spending on
the
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pubalic
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public
 transport.
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,
this
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 could be insignificant as the rate of tax is low to disincentivise drivers.
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, the legal authority should project clearly
to
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so as to
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not create
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 any backfires.
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, some
cars
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 could be used in illegal activities
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 as delivering drugs and guns.
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, Mexican cartels mainly
utilised
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 their vehicles to
traport
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transport
 illegal substances to the U.S.
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, there would be higher crime rates if there
is
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were
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 no strong
law
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laws
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 to prevent serious incidents.
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,
a
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apply
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various types of identification should be
fulled
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filled
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 by the
govenment
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government
 to create a safe society in the area. In conclusion, constructing laws and alternatives for
cars
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are
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is
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 crucial to
solve
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 social problems
such
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 as traffic jams and
creation
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the creation
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 of illegal communities. I strongly argue that these
process
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processes
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 are needed as long as they benefit the government rather than the society.

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structure
Each paragraph addresses a separate point, which helps maintain a clear organization and logical flow in the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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