Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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It is widely acknowledged that modern
technology
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has brought
people
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together, but there are
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others
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disagreeing
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with
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idea. As far as I'm concerned, I partly agree with
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idea. On the one hand, the development of
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effectively brings
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together.
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, the internet covers an extremely long distance with signals.
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,
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in the past had to travel to certain
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to meet their friends in another city,
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contemporarily,
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are accessible to each other online.
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, the internet provides
people
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with a platform where everyone can give his or her own opinion and can learn what others think.
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, in ancient
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, only reputed
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could write
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views down and spread his views among
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, but contemporarily, everyone was endowed
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chance to discuss online, which really unit the
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.
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, with the help of emerging
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--artificial
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, it is estimated that some of the exhausting
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will be replaced, so
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can search more profoundly in their spiritual world, which actually makes
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more sympathetic.
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, to some extent, modern
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also
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drives
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apart. As is said, the internet provides
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with a platform to show their own ideas, which
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means that there
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more chance for radical and cynical ideas to be exposed to all walks of life.
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are more likely to be divided ideologically into different parties, causing more conflicts, which could be an expensive and exhausting election in
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society or a war to drive
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more apart and more astray. In conclusion, I believe that modern
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is helpful, and
people
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could form a more unbreakable union with the help of modern
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, but
people
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should always be aware that modern
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is
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endowed with
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potentials
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to drive us apart, so
people
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must be saner and more sensitive to avoid
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kind of risks

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task achievement
Ensure each argument is well-supported with specific examples to strengthen the discussion.
coherence cohesion
Address minor grammatical errors to improve clarity and readability.
coherence cohesion
Include clear transitions between paragraphs to guide the reader through your arguments smoothly.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction effectively sets up the discussion by presenting both viewpoints and stating the writer's stance.
complete response
The essay covers both perspectives fairly and provides a balanced discussion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fostering
  • Global connections
  • Isolation
  • Diminished
  • Face-to-face interactions
  • Cultural and geographical divides
  • Paradox
  • Social media
  • Alienating
  • Family dynamics
  • Echo chambers
  • Polarize
  • Marginalized communities
  • Inclusivity
  • Maintaining relationships
  • Evolution of communication
  • Instant messaging
  • Video calls
  • Technological advances
  • Collaboration
  • Remote isolation
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