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Stress is now a major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the reasons that cause stress, and effects?

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It is an irrefutable fact that, in the contemporary world,
stress
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 become the main barrier
in
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to
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 the growth of different countries.
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 a trend comes with
alot
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a lot
 of
problems
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, which demand immediate consideration.
This
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competition
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 level and the high inflation and the impact of these
problems
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 on
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human
being
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beings
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 as mental health
issue
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 in the upcoming paragraphs
along with
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stress
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. The first and foremost cause of
stress
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 is
high
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 level of
competition
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 in the market. To explain, today's world
known
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 for its
competition
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, everyone
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 with each other just to get better opportunities as the job applications are more in comparison to the occupation vacancies.
According to
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 one survey
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Indian
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the Indian
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times
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, nowadays more than 40%
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prople
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people
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in
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under
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stress
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,
individual
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individually
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 their competitors who are creating barriers
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 their growth.
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 to that, high inflation is
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 creating mental pressure on the individual mind because they are facing issues for their survival,
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 the high
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 of basic
item
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.
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,
lot
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 of
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 are measured in different areas.
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,
stress
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 creates many health
problems
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. To be more detailed, people who are taking
stress
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 usually face heart attack
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as well as
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 mental health issues like depression. As per research
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BC, around 28%
people
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of people
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 in Canada
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 every year because of heart
attack
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attacks
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.
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, it impacts the entire growth of any country because any nation can only become successful if the individuals of that country are mentally healthy and able to come
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 better creations.
To conclude
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, there are many causes behind
stress
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 like
high
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the high
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 cost of living and
competition
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 for employment which have
huge
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 impact on the
overall
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wellbeing
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well-being
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 of human
being
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beings
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 and the development of any part of
this
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 world.

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grammar
Pay close attention to grammatical accuracy and syntactic variety to elevate the overall quality of your writing. Simple corrections such as subject-verb agreement and verb tense consistency can make a significant difference.
elaboration
Expand more on each of the main points. Providing more in-depth explanations and elaborations will strengthen your arguments. For instance, you can discuss the effects of competition and inflation on different demographics or sectors.
structure
The essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion that effectively frame the discussion.
cohesion
The structure of the essay is logical, with separate paragraphs dedicated to causes and effects.
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